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Wingless by ~fae:iconfae:

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WINGLESS 2.26.2003

Watch me fall so fast
Wanting just to feel this breeze
Maybe for once I won\'t worry
About the labels
The lies
The failures
That is me.

Fallen angel I am,
Lost in a wood of sorrow
Grief-stricken at the sudden loss
Of her wings. Wingless Angels
Can\'t fly home...
But I am too scathed to belong.

Frozen in a time
Where looks are everything
And you only get anywhere if
Your dad can pay your way
Or you have more braincells
Than Mensa
But I have neither. I have
Only the memory of wings
And the memory of love,
Memories that are kept locked away
Far from light that would
Burn them like a negative onto my soul.

Broken Angel, why do you cry?
Rain is soft still, although it hurts
It hides your tears
And cools your angry fears
Don\'t crack, Angel, although you feel hollow
There\'s still something left for you

If you can find it.
©2003-2010 ~fae
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Author's Comments

Yes... I am wingless.

There is no such thing as a bad kid. We're all perfect human beings until told otherwise.

Never tell a kid that they're bad and mean it... it sticks forever.

:( (Sad)

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~sugarangel Feb 26, 2003, 11:40:56 PM
this is beautiful... such true emotions which seem to float... love it..

candy

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~wickedlysweet Feb 27, 2003, 12:47:47 AM
Wow that is very emotional I like it....
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~freakpsychocaine Feb 27, 2003, 6:39:47 AM
Horns sweet...

well done fae

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~rudepunkgurly Feb 27, 2003, 10:39:55 AM
....+fav ......

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!lilitheternity Feb 27, 2003, 12:12:51 PM
i really love the flow in this...beautiful

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~eclipz04 Feb 27, 2003, 1:29:55 PM
"Broken Angel, why do you cry?
Rain is soft still, although it hurts
It hides your tears
And cools your angry fears
Don't crack, Angel, although you feel hollow
There's still something left for you"

that was the most beautiful stanza. My comments are going to be so worthless.. but that was amazing. It was truely touching and moving and yeah. wonderful job ames.

-brita-

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~silfo Feb 27, 2003, 1:53:28 PM
so beautiful... :) (Smile)

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~sollitaire Feb 27, 2003, 3:34:21 PM
I can so relate - good stuff!

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~water-elemental Feb 27, 2003, 4:05:58 PM
Mm..The thoughts are well expressed. The first stanza introduces the rest of the poem wonderfully. The flow seemed to get a little 'lost' in the third stanza, but the ending really made finishing the poem worthwhile. It's just the line:
"Than Mensa"
Seems so out of place in the rest of the stanza, which is filled with longer lines. Overall, though, I enjoied reading. Thanks for sharing!

~h20


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